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23 Jun 2008, 09:09

VERY BAD... REVENGE IS ALWAYS A BAD THING... KAHIHIYAN DIN NG PAMILYA RIN NILA YAN... HAAY...IT CAN REALLY BLIND YOU... PERO FINANCIALLY, SEEMS UNREALISTIC DIS WHOLE THING... PANO NA-MADJIK MGA PERA NYA... LOST DETAILS ON THAT, PERO TOO MUCH DETAILS ON LEGAL AND LOGISTICS...HAAY...JUST OBSERVATION LANG PO

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Like I said..I welcome criticisms...honestly, this will be my first story that I will finish due to consistent pressure...naka line up na yung next "sabi ng dyos" but this one will be political...since it will deal with the politicians running our country, the catholic church, the insurgents, the media, the very ever active militant groups and the common people who are victimize by propaganda...

anyway...the money of jake/rey is coming from the stocks that he acquired from Don jaime...which is actively traded in the stock market..and since the Umali family want to buy back their shares of stocks...then Monica..who works for rey/jake in manila is the one facilitating all the money and selling it by bulk to the umali's...and wiring all the money to Iloilo wherein Jake/rey decided to build a seperate company and his base....

as you can see...which I had discussed in earlier chapters...jake/rey has an ICP personality...and a PTS..post traumatic syndrome

A person diagnosed with something called obsessive-impulsive disorder is similar to OCD but where, instead of set routines or regular obsessions, the person instead felt an overwhelming urge to act out whatever just came into their minds to do.

This will explain...his being impulsive ...making quick decisions without even thinking about it....and siphoning his money just to destroy San Jose and to get the attention of boy....his obssession....

I don't want any loopholes in the story...and being interactive...I can explain things that runs in my thoughts that I cannot write in the story...

Like did you notice the change in formats....now...we have time dividers....like 9:00 am..or Saturday....I don't want a boring story....I want to inject new formats so the readers will also think...and soon...which I am not sure..there would be flashbacks...

I should have close the book at chapter 33...with the last line..."babalik tayo sa San Jose" and chapter 34 should have been book 2..with different chapters...kaya ngayon...it is now like part 18 na ba....

I will be on vacation this weekend...going to sydney ...and I will close the book at chapter 34....please read the recent events in Iloilo...I will based the story from those events in the next part of chapter 34...

Follow up: foxonfire* [msg] [block!]
23 Jun 2008, 09:19

sori..forgot to mention about Legal and Logistics...

the reason for this is for the readers to educate them in the future chapters....and yes..there will be legal battles and litigation...corporate battles...about logistics...this is extremely important...I want the readers to know...how extravagant jake has become....and with the internet leased line...because in the future chapters..there would be a lot of video conferencing scenes..from his base in Iloilo..to Manila, Zurich, Los Angeles, London, etc...kasi baka magtaka kayo like the commercial of globe telecom na...teka..hindi naman totoo yun ehh..super bagal kaya ang connection at super liit yung picture sa chat....something like that..that is why...he uses a Mac airbook...so logistics play a vital role in chapter 34....his base camp is very important...maraming eksena dun sa book 2..so gusto ko na ma picture nyo yung office nya...

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23 Jun 2008, 10:09

Final results ng Polls:

Do you want the story to end?

Yes = 14%

No = 64%

Maybe = 4%

Cut it chapter 50 = 17%

here's the new question:

Sino gusto nyo mamatay sa ending ng book 1

1. Lahat ng Taga San Jose

2. Boy/ted

3. Bernie

4. Tito

5. Monica

6. Carla

7. Joseph